Alaina (completed)

[alaina]

Alaina

"Don't think it's just a game. Your life's on the line. "

Age:17
Gender: female
Family: unknown
Race: human
Sexual Orientation: straight
Home World: Besaid
Alignment: good
Job: none
Items: nothing special
Accessories: a pink jewel that gives her magic
Appearance:

Alaina has red short hair, her eyes are brown and big, and she's quite slim. Alaina's outfit consists of a purple crop top with long bell-shaped sleeves, a green mini skirt, turquoise and green tights, and purple boots just below her knees. She has short wings that help her jump high and stay on air for a while. Her hair stays in a bob, but two strands of her hair have grown longer in the front.

Personality: Alaina is sensitive towards other people's feelings. She is known to have a fiery and unstable temper, but she has the personality of a great leader. Alaina has issues with trusting people because she is scared of being let down or rejected. She has grown more cheerful as time passed and she learns how to be good friends with others.

She is flirty, she is very aggressive and if she doesn't like you, she will not be kind with you. She loves food and can't resist sweets and candy -still she is thin. She won't agree with you if she has a different opinion on things. Even if you're right, she will not be interested to listen what you have to say.

She is the kind of person that doesn't want to say no. She always on for adventures, wants to have a great time and good memories. She's not that sad anymore that she grew up alone. She got over it and learned to stand alone strong and never give up on a fight. She is also searching for this one thing that would make her happy. She wants to love and be loved and make people she cares for happy.

History: She doesn't want people to care about her past. Her parents died when she was little and she doesn't remember them. She grew up at Besaid and a family friend raised her. Now she leaves alone. She didn't have to work because her parents were quite rich. She didn't care for money, she would never spend them on silly things. She is a witch. She learned alone to control her magic and being strong.

She learned about her magic when she was little. She always felt different from other kids, and when she found out how she could use fire and burn things she thought she was crazy. After a while she practiced and could control her actions better. Her mother left her her things when she died. One of them was a pink jewel. When she wore it, she felt stronger her magic was better and her fighting skills increased. Since then she fights without fear and wants peace to all of the worlds. She dreams to explore most of the worlds and make them a safe place.

She was always hang out with boys. Either to be friends with them, date them or just flirt them to help her out when in trouble. When she's dating she's always loyal. She doesn't like lies. She had her heart broken from a boy before that only wanted her help him defeating enemies and nothing more -when he was saying to her that he "loved" her. That's why she doesn't trust boys that much and didn't work that hard on relationships. She says that she doesn't need someone like that and he only bring her trouble. She can't admit to herself that having someone by her side could make her happy.


Abilities: her magic. When she doesn't use magic she can attack punching kicking and stuff.
Summons: none
Magic:
fire
life
curaga
cure
shield
She is able to open folds to move between dimensions and different locations within worlds.
Strengths: confidence, friends, magic
Weaknesses: food, boys, getting in trouble
Weapon: nothing else but her pink jewel
Crushes: who knows
How did you find us? idk >.<
Role Play Sample: I'm already roleplaying Yuna so check it out I guess:p

Password: Glorious Walruses

[rufus]

Alright, this application is going to need a little revising before it can be accepted or denied. First off, there are some grammatical issues, but they are easy fixes. Just commas that need to be placed and such. Second, the race should be either possibly expanded on in either the History, or just changed into a Human/Hume, and then expand that she is a witch in the Personality or History. Once again, an easy fix. And third, try to expand on the Personality and History. Explain why she is the way she is, and give us more that brought her to where she is now and how she possibly got her crystal. The last paragraph of the History, also, sounds like something that should be placed in the Personality.

[alaina]

i updated it!^^ hope it's better now..:/

[Oerba Yun Fang]

Well hello there!

I read over the application again and I must say, it needs a tad bit more tweaking. And who's here to help? Your friendly neighborhood creeper adminly person! First thing is the personality. It's somewhat all over the place. Generally speaking, it's helpful to us to have the personality smoothly transitioning. The start says "Alaina is sensitive towards other people's feelings. She is known to have a fiery and unstable temper, but she has the personality of a great leader." Now, having different personality traits is normal, we all have them, but going so quickly from one to the other without elaborating makes it hard to really get a feel for her personality. What I'd like you to do is elaborate on each different personality type, first focusing on the sensitive part, and then another paragraph explaining her fiery and unstable temper. I would appreciate each paragraph having a little more explanation of the rest of her personality as well.

Now as for history, you don't explain really how she became a witch, or only briefly touched on it. Since being a witch isn't common in Spira, I would like for you to add more detail about why she is the way she is, making the transitions just a bit smoother. More detail is always appreciated.

Another thing is a few words need to be fixed up. 'learnt' is spelled 'learned', and a few other phrases need cleaning up. Thanks! ^_^